Julia’s Reviews > Evenfall: Volume 1: Director's Cut > Status Update
Julia
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Writing:
- way too much telling, too little showing
- needs to be shorted. Unnecessary words, superfluous paragraphs
Characters:
- two MCs are extremely intriguing. The rest is relatively okay
Plot/Missions:
- dont give a rat's *** about the missions, I'm just here for Hsin and Boyd
— Jan 02, 2022 11:22PM
- way too much telling, too little showing
- needs to be shorted. Unnecessary words, superfluous paragraphs
Characters:
- two MCs are extremely intriguing. The rest is relatively okay
Plot/Missions:
- dont give a rat's *** about the missions, I'm just here for Hsin and Boyd
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Julia
is 70% done
TW: suicidal thoughts/character, PTSD and severe trauma, murder, killing in various manners
— Jan 03, 2022 09:38AM
Julia
is 45% done
The whump is so, so so so so sooooo good, holy f- and hail mary
— Jan 03, 2022 03:59AM
Julia
is 20% done
I love Boyd and Hsins interactions and detest the fact that Boyd just snoops around for information about Hsin behind his back. It's stalkery and a clear breach of trust and privacy. I hope they take this out in the next director's cut. It's even unneccessary. Like, fine if Boyd happens to notice the surveillance cam in Hsin's bathroom and somehow gets a half-minute's glance at it, but the extent of what he does is j
— Jan 03, 2022 01:00AM
