✮Octjillery✮’s Reviews > Torn Apart > Status Update

Some major editing issues with this so far. There are about a billion comma splices on every page that really disrupt the reading flow.

Example: When packs arrived for a gathering, they brought as many able-bodied pack members as possible, but they did not bring every pack member, some could not make the journey, such as mothers with young cubs, and many would also remain to guard their den and defend the territory.