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Has it not occurred to Chauvelin that no matter how much the public might fall for his mud-slinging campaign against the Scarlet Pimpernel, a few loyal souls certainly won’t? Can one really imagine Sir Andrew and Lord Tony accepting that Sir Percy has been a rat all along? But that’s a villain for you.
Also…has it not occurred to these characters…that it’s terribly wearing…to speak in ellipses all the time…?
— Jun 23, 2022 06:03AM
Also…has it not occurred to these characters…that it’s terribly wearing…to speak in ellipses all the time…?
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Jun 25, 2022 06:46AM
I speak in ellipsis all the time… and my characters speak in ellipsis all the time too XD
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An ellipsis is all well and good when someone is trailing off. But ellipses are not substitutes for good old-fashioned full stops. It’s to ridiculous amounts in this one—narrative as well as dialogue.
The effect is like reading a transcription complete with all the ums and ers and incomplete thoughts. Just because people may do it in real life doesn’t mean it’s a smooth reading experience!Sir Percy: “You hound!…you dog!…you cur!…do you not see that I must strangle you for this!…”
The attack had been so sudden and violent that Chauvelin had not the time to utter the slightest call for help.
Never mind that it’s terribly dramatic; I expect that. But it gives the uncomfortable sense that Sir Percy is faltering when, to the contrary, he is quite the master of the situation. One might at least use dashes in good old Austen style.
