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Uh wow. I think we already have plenty of drama Paul. So not sure that we need you even if Sean will most likely end up saving Eden from your stupid ass
— Feb 26, 2011 03:29PM
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Feb 26, 2011 03:33PM
I can tell you haven't got to the point where I even gave up on WTF. Comes a little later in the story...
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Chapter 12 finished & I am not a happy camper. Sean is now absolved because killed Paul in self defence? WHAT THE FUCK?!?!? (see it still works if you capitalize it)
So glad you're having fun. You should have joined me and Sonya last night. It could have been a nice 3-way.
Sonya wrote: "Wait till you get to the part where WTF doesn't even work anymore."I just finished it, but I can't help it: WHAT THE FUCK?????
I was ok with the POV that everyone else has problems with. But, but, but, but. This couple is destined to live in a trailer park and have the cops called out for domestic disturbance about.....2 times a month.
Do they have trailers in Canada? Because that's where they're moving: a cabin, a husky and married life.ETA: Do the Mounties have jurisdiction on domestic disputes?
The POV thing was something that might have helped the early part of the story. But later on, none of them made any sense AND they all (including Paul) had POV time. I couldn't see that it changed anything.
Eden will probably manage to commit suicide on one of those bungee cord mood swings, or maybe Sean will kill him off in one of his angry moments. So the cops won't have to worry about them for too long!
Eden will probably manage to commit suicide on one of those bungee cord mood swings, or maybe Sean will kill him off in one of his angry moments. So the cops won't have to worry about them for too long!
Kate Mc. wrote: "Eden will probably manage to commit suicide on one of those bungee cord mood swings, or maybe Sean will kill him off in one of his angry moments. So the cops won't have to worry about them for too long!"Oh definitely that will happen eventually, but I'm betting on a good 20 years of domestic disturbance calls before one of them actually goes through with it.
Sonya wrote: "Do they have trailers in Canada? Because that's where they're moving: a cabin, a husky and married life.ETA: Do the Mounties have jurisdiction on domestic disputes?"
And does anyone even know how hard it is to actually up and move to Canada? You know there are laws about that sort of thing. I doubt that a disgraced cop has anything that Canada is looking for.
I bet if a Mountie saw the disturbance then he would be a doorighter & intervene. Specially if his name was Dudley.
Actually Canada doesn't like us moving north. They make it rather difficult, unless you just want to visit.
Who knows. Eden might dump Sean and run off with Dudley. I bet you can stay in Canada if you marry a Canadian. I don't know who'd end up with the husky and the cabin, though.
Who knows. Eden might dump Sean and run off with Dudley. I bet you can stay in Canada if you marry a Canadian. I don't know who'd end up with the husky and the cabin, though.
Custody battles can get so messy. I get the cabin and the dog because you ruined my life and then made me love you.
Or Eden just flirts with Dudley (you know, cause he is SUCH a slut) and then Sean murders them both. Then gets sent back to the U.S. because Canada doesn't even want to deal with his shit.
I'm thinking we should write the sequel for her. It has A LOT of promise already and we've hardly gotten started.
I think the husky should be named Paul & that starts the majority of their domestic disturbances. Which is how Eden meets Dudley.There ya go - abbreviated outline is complete!
Genius! I never thought to name the dog after Paul. Maybe a squeaky toy gun for Paul to toss around.
Stop! Spitting coffee onto the laptop isn't good for it!!!

