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Isn't it, like... standard practice to use other descriptive words over "said" a million times???
I am so frustrated with the constant "Angel said, Kirby said, Jackson said" with the random "Jackson asked" thrown in, that I'm struggling to follow the storyline.
If there is so much conversation, PLEASE find some other descriptive words to throw in. What about a "she replied".... just one!
Writing 101, right?
— Mar 03, 2023 03:14PM
I am so frustrated with the constant "Angel said, Kirby said, Jackson said" with the random "Jackson asked" thrown in, that I'm struggling to follow the storyline.
If there is so much conversation, PLEASE find some other descriptive words to throw in. What about a "she replied".... just one!
Writing 101, right?
