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Tajinder is on page 298 of 352

Still very much awkwardly written at some points. But the story is compelling

— Nov 03, 2023 11:12PM

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Tajinder is on page 54 of 352

I’m not too far in but I felt the need to be nitpicky and mention this because I’ve been thrown off by it twice so far. There is unnecessary science jargon where it doesn’t belong. Randomly, the narrator says “ACTH floods into my system” cool bro but didn’t need to mention the hormone feedback loop from Bio 30. Also says “another fire truck dopplers past” can you use the doppler effect as a verb?

— Jul 12, 2023 08:47PM