Ethan Van Der Bos’s Reviews > WHISPER Flashpoint > Status Update
Ethan Van Der Bos
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*Lots* of exposition dumping through walls of text. With this many new, named, characters, take the 300+ pages of the book to space out this information so there's no overload on the reader. Also, Fero forgot to end-quote a sentence and missed a typo ('Doctor' as 'Dcotor') - Again, all interesting info, but show, don't tell
— Feb 09, 2024 06:05PM
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Ethan Van Der Bos
is on page 85 of 336
Another chapter of newly introduced, named, characters - between these new entries, plus the insane amount of tactical and military exposition and jargon, chapter 7 requires a lot of focus to follow events. But, if I understand right, the Antagonist has *finally* entered the game - High hopes, I'll be watching him close.
— Feb 16, 2024 09:59AM
Ethan Van Der Bos
is on page 69 of 336
The twist this chapter would have had a much stronger impact had the relationship between the relevant characters been explored more thoroughly, and if this twist came later - while I'm interested to see where the current situation goes for this group, I wish things didn't feel so rushed along
— Feb 15, 2024 11:23PM
Ethan Van Der Bos
is on page 57 of 336
Despite it being the same structure and execution as the last chapter, it felt a lot more engaging seeing this council have a back-and-forth about the matter of independence. While both arguments were represented, it did feel a bit one-sided, but I'm hoping later in the book the consequences are explored.
— Feb 15, 2024 02:18PM
