Navi’s Reviews > King of Sloth > Status Update

"Obviously, that was who she was talking about; Mariana was staring straight at Sloane’s square on the screen"
It's a zoom meeting with everyone connected from their own PC and so everyone's square placement on their screen is different you cannot tell who is looking at who.
Be calm...suspend the disbelief...God I can't..it's so annoying. I can't the look the other way

Last 30 pages are a drag. Powering through to finish it

"and though it needed major work, the right team for the right price could get the job done in two months. I happily paid that price out of my own pocket."

What own pocket...he hasnt earned any money in his entire life...what "own pocket"

Its fiction...i get all suspension of disbelief...but come on you cant know if it was arson or not. Shaved off wires and placed just so it would catch fire...not even sherlock can come up with that cause post fire, evidence would be burnt.
If there was trace of say gasoline or some fire acccelerant that was found , sure arson...fire i spectors are not incompetent.