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"Ophelia lost panting moments, then. Her mind stood outside her body, wreathed in fog, and she didn't know the time."

I'm seeing dissociation everywhere in books I'm reading lately...

"...while vapor chugged from all the vents like vapor heating the inky night..."

Shockingly bad given the rest is so good. Of course vapor is like vapor because it is, in fact, vapor so nothing can be more vapor like. An editor REALLY should have caught this, but given it's the one error I can find so far/have noticed, probably five stars.