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Jaxon(Jax)[They-He]
(last edited Jan 08, 2017 04:13PM)
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Jan 08, 2017 03:38PM
((For members of the Shane Gang))
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The main cavern and the bedrooms
*shane twins walk in* morning everyone! rookie said
Emma was sitting on a couch, flipping through channels in boredom. She sighed as she continued to flip through channels.
((lol sory)) rookie walks over to emma, mornin sis, mom, dad, korg, and pronto!
((You forgot to capitalize names and add quotes when she's speaking))Emma looked at Rookie "Hey Rukia." She said, a bored tone in her voice as she turned her attention back to TV.
((u know i dont do that! i just do it the way i do ppl know wat im doing))
*rookie gives hugs to everyone*
((sory its just how i am i cant keep track of evrything))
((today shall be the day rookie gets her slug gear))
((k)) rookie said, if your wondering why im so happy today well..... today is the day i get my slugs!
((You keep forgetting quotes))"Um, yeah kinda figured. Today's the day I get to go out on my own." Emma said.
"cool, if mom and dad let me im coming too!", she said
rookie looks imploringly at their parents and says, "mom dad can i?"
"hey", she protested, "i can take care of myself thank you very much.. besides i got burpy to look after me too"
"If Dad allows Burpy to come with." She said.Burpy chirped happily as if saying he wants to come with.
((The comma goes in the quotes, Burpy needs to have a capitalized B because its a name, needs to have a period behind the o of too and in front of the end quotes))
"he already said yes emma," rookie said
Emma said, "He said yes for you to come with."((Capitalize the R in Rookie, and the E in Emma, also capitalize the H in he))
"Dad, can i take burpy and the others please," she said and gave another imploring look
Eli sighed and said, "fine, but take good care of them"
Eli sighed and said, "fine, but take good care of them"
"Yay! thanks Dad!," she said as she ran over and tackled him with a hug
rookie rolled her eyes and said, "i know that and im gonna get slugs just like Dads!"
"also can i use your mech please?," she asked
"sure but one scratch and your back to square one no leaving without one of us if that happens got it?," Eli said
"sure but one scratch and your back to square one no leaving without one of us if that happens got it?," Eli said
Emma walked to the garage.((You don't need commas if you have a question mark or a period in the quotes))
rookie followed and said, "im driving!"
"ok!" she said and hoped on the wolf mech and said, "lets go!"
"boo!" rookie said, "im going with korg and pronto"
((Kord not Korg))"Come on, this might be a great bonding experience." She said.
((Im planning an attack on the mall from Mitrik's bandits/followers))
((ok))
"ok!" she said and followed
"ok!" she said and followed


