Status Updates From The Friendship Contract (Te...

Some of the transitions in terms of movement and thought of the characters is unclear. One moment they’re sitting next to one another and now somehow they’re either behind one another or on top or something I’m not really sure. “Their bodies are melded together…” whatever that means and her hand is in his dick now…I’m confused.

Some of the wording and inner thoughts are awkwardly placed and I feel like there is a lot more telling me than showing me.

So far, I enjoy the witty commentary and banter the main character gives the reader. Excited to see where this goes.

slow burn,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, but yessssssssssssssssssssssss

oh this is GOOD!