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Laura
is on page 124 of 288
Kinda...feels all over the place and the story is very...jumpy? Idk :)
— Jul 18, 2023 01:05PM
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Laura
is on page 44 of 288
No, ok, I am more bothered by the grammar stuff. There's no commas in sight for the vocative case?? And then there's sentences that go like "She was wearing in yellow trousers [...]" and "Eddie, an usually tall boy [...]" (although maybe the author did want to say that Eddie was just usually tall instead of unusually, how would I know).
Also, some of the sentence lengths chop up the reading experience :(
— Jul 10, 2023 04:15PM
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Also, some of the sentence lengths chop up the reading experience :(
Laura
is on page 40 of 288
This book required more/better proof-reading. Promising so far, though
— Jul 10, 2023 04:02PM
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