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Betty
Betty is on page 89 of 189
Jun 09, 2017 08:24AM Add a comment
Husband for Hire

Eliabeth Hawthorne
Eliabeth Hawthorne is 68% done
Quite a few sentences start with And or But. One sentence fragment. Very little description or world building. Everything feels hurried and glossed over, like someone summarizing an event instead of the author painting the scene and characters with depth. "show don't tell."
Jul 06, 2015 06:29PM Add a comment
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Eliabeth Hawthorne
Eliabeth Hawthorne is 50% done
Who falls in love with an actor?
Jul 04, 2015 07:35PM Add a comment
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Eliabeth Hawthorne
Eliabeth Hawthorne is 41% done
I am thankful that my family loves me more than the idea of me. I never have to lie to live up to their standards.
Jul 04, 2015 06:32PM Add a comment
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Eliabeth Hawthorne
Eliabeth Hawthorne is 8% done
Really don't like the character list at the beginning. Thought I was about to read a play. I'd rather learn that information from the story than try to keep names straight without meeting the characters. Started a sentence with And.
Jul 04, 2015 12:39PM Add a comment
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