Status Updates From Imagine

Needs editing, stat. It's like a dying, needs a heart transplant patient. Also, the 17 year old sounds more like a 13 year old.

So far, it's a bit dry, but it is a cute story about a girl learning to deal with a new school, new friends and a boy she likes. It could definitely use some editing. I usually complain about comma overuse, but this actually needs more. Also, the flow could have been smoothed out; the style is very choppy.