Status Updates From Cash (Glendale Magic)

Why are the texting segments so weird? The person we’re currently in the POV of should be blue to the right. The person they’re texting should be grey to the left. The names of the tester inside the text box makes it read like it’s part of the text.

I’m finding it hard to believe that players would be able to volunteer at an all day, week long kids training camp during playoffs…

I’m finding the book needs a little editing. There’s similar phrases in the same paragraph (same words used).

On page 43, Connor changes gender:

“The look on his face stirred some jealous feelings in Evie. He simply adored Sasha, and it was written all over her face.”

i’m not sure if the author has ever seen an actual text message