Status Updates From Phixmery (The Damorleia Chr...

I’m annoyed. I don’t feel connected to the characters or story and the transitions between situation and experiences r very choppy. I’m finishing it just to finish it atp. :/

Ugh idk it’s giving way watered down fourth wing but make it RH. It feels like a story that’s only comprised of an outline of plot points and characters. Sometimes the answer or problem is just solve for explain right away and other ideas are not flushed out. Scenes of action shld be longer and there needs to be more dialogue.