Status Updates From Wing Weaver

Chap 15

Very descriptive writing but done in a way that builds the sensory levels of the setting and propels the story forward.
Our MC is squeaky clean so far. I need to see Aeden have at least one flaw.
I hate bullies. In this story so far it’s motivated by a matter of superiority which isn’t very strong. Maybe I’m missing something.

Chap 11
Writing style is very smooth. I’m connecting with Aeden.

Chap 6