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Brandielle
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Fate’s Bridge by Carol Lynne - meh. Hard to establish 2 MCs we care about in a short story, let alone 3.
— Feb 27, 2019 09:35AM
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Bronwyn Heeley
is on page 163 of 198
4 -- 2.5 maybe 3
Repetative, like REAL 'i read the same line four time in the first oage' repetative.
To me, it needed a better BETA or MS editor. It had me rushing threw it, rolling my eyes and wanting ti highlight and send back so they could fix it before submitting.
The story itslef was good, the idea solid. exacusion was like i was reading a first draft.
— Aug 07, 2015 06:19AM
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Repetative, like REAL 'i read the same line four time in the first oage' repetative.
To me, it needed a better BETA or MS editor. It had me rushing threw it, rolling my eyes and wanting ti highlight and send back so they could fix it before submitting.
The story itslef was good, the idea solid. exacusion was like i was reading a first draft.
Bronwyn Heeley
is on page 124 of 198
3--3
Predictable, all i wanted to do was flip it forward and see the ending. It became a drag waiting for the end
— Aug 07, 2015 04:34AM
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Predictable, all i wanted to do was flip it forward and see the ending. It became a drag waiting for the end
Bronwyn Heeley
is on page 42 of 198
1 - 4stars
unexpectidly good
— Aug 06, 2015 07:21AM
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unexpectidly good
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is 20% done
Carol Lynne's story was lovely, very nice beginning, looks promising
— Jul 20, 2015 03:43PM
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