Status Updates From Alien Warrior's Possession ...

I find this hard to continue reading. The urge to bang my head on a wall is strong. It's just the whole tone of the writing and little things like...could their thoughts be in a italics or something rather than being told..."she/he thought"
The main gist of the story is interesting enough but the execution is awful...sorry.

I find the writing somewhat stilted and wooden. The ideas are good but...