Status Updates From Ascension of the Whyte (The...

Ehhhh I think this concept is wholly ruined by making it a magic school situation. I think the core idea here is good, with the whole afterlife immortals etc., but this is incredibly juvenile and the mistakes with word choice/typos/punctuation are really distracting, not that there’s much to be distracted from

This is… not good so far. Interesting concept but the execution is pretty bad and juvenile.

I'm really not looking forward to anymore conversations where the characters address each other by name every sentence. There's only two of you, surely it can't be that confusing.

This isn't doing much for me yet.

Comma, semicolon, you are not supposed to be there. You should've been in other places.

Ahahahaha. This is ridiculous. Why am I still reading this?

Ahahahaha. This is ridiculous. Why am I still reading this?

I am not feeling this. It's kind of similar to Mortal Enchantment. Grammar and punctuation problems, too.

Ka is alive! Oh, and those students are just jealous because the Whyte cell is always at the top.

I have got to see these dancing bees! Oooh, I wanna see Ash do that :)

very intriguing!