Status Updates From A Demon's Debt (The Desdemo...

She’s being super mean to the guys so far. Yes, she’s been depressed as hell, not sleeping or eating and kind of falling apart, but the guys are sweet and she’s just yelling and swearing at them constantly.

Actually, the POV is all wrong. It's a chapter that doesn't seem to stick to one POV since it let's the reader into multiple character's heads. Like some sort of weird present tense omniscient narrator. Bleh.

Super strange POV shift here. And if it is Adam, why not just SAY it's Adam? Not like we do not know they character, and everyone there knows him too. All the "the demon"s are irritating.

Yeah, I agree Asmodeus, I'd have killed her multiple times by now too. She is really becoming rather annoying.

Yep, I agree with you Nick. She's an idiot.

Grr..."Moany Mona". It fits. Her snark and sass have turned into nothing but irritating whining, and I am getting sick of it.

*sigh* Why would anyone, who knows they are in mortal danger all the time, be so passive and lazy that they don't even bother to try to learn things to protect themselves? I have never understood that in ANY book I've read when it happens. Were it me, I'd be doing everything I could to learn how to protect myself. Hope Mona grows up soon!

And the grammatical errors have continued. Maybe more prevalently in book 2. Sigh. Most are verb and prepositional problems. Some typos. Example: "I was definitely sat hunched over for too long." Bleh

Gotta say that I am not much enjoying Mona in book 2 so far. She has become apathetic, whiny, and self-absorbed. I hope this is a phase and passes QUICKLY...or I won't be continuing on with the series.