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“He knocked on the (car) window, startling me. I recovered quickly, and cranked the handle down…”

What kind of car does Tam drive? Unless we are in a time period where the majority of the cars still had handles to operate the windows. 🤔

Annoying amounts of unnecessary detail. I don’t need to know what a glass of water looked like. I don’t give two shits about it being short and wide. It doesn’t contribute to the story, and unless your goal is purple prose, it’s …ugh - I repeat - annoying. Speaking of using same words within a span of the same sentence/paragraph - use thesaurus!
Argh! Frustrating 😡

Is it me or is the writing a bit confusing, like maybe it needs editing? I mean - as a tiny itsy-bitsy example - how do you “regard someone with parted lips, with your eyes narrowing”? Just awkward.
Also, in Vince’s POV chapter he thinks of Baz as “Vince’s nephew”.
A couple of sentences didn’t make sense at all, as I tried reading them slower. This writing is disruptive:(

im a lil confused... this is first in a series but this one event that keeps getting referenced makes me wonder if there isn't another connected series/book where that event happened?? but if so i can't find it?

Thrown right into the story. A lot seems to have happened before the story and I’m confused. I hope it all comes together.