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Eric
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Auch, that hurts. A homunculus, some homunculi. ;)
— Aug 28, 2020 05:20PM
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Eric
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p.143/268. unkempt , not unkept...
(not remarking on everything, but some of these things just stare at me. The “unkept man” - there’s a pun there...)
— Aug 28, 2020 05:18PM
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(not remarking on everything, but some of these things just stare at me. The “unkept man” - there’s a pun there...)
Eric
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p.89/268. Also, “the butler, who they called Jeeves”- what a weird name for a butler. You know that Bertie’s Jeeves wasn’t a butler, right?
— Aug 28, 2020 04:03PM
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Eric
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Sometimes sentence fragments feel “right”- but sometimes (The walk... was a long one. Made easier for her by..) one just feels in reading “would it -kill- the author to insert words (eg “It was” made easier...)? Helps with flow and readability, many times , too...
— Aug 28, 2020 04:01PM
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