Status Updates From Nightshade Academy (Bellado...

The writing in this has gotten considerably better and I’m enjoying it much more than when I first started

Not sure how I’m feeling about this one tbh. The concept is there and the prologue was good but the characters feel a little empty. Lines like “”Quax spoke ill of me,” Yahshi said.” Feel so forced and don’t match how the character usually communicate and character growth is just as forced/snappy. Definitely reads like someone’s first novel

Oh wow it’s getting interesting 😼

Interesting Sixteen years old and bully….

Aww childish banter with Yahshi and Quax

How old are they why are they in chasing each other in the woods? I am lowkey getting hunger games vibes slightly I don’t know why

Why are they in a detainment facility? What a interesting situation

Really struggling to remember who is who. The characters aren’t all that distinct in personality or voice. Even the main character’s name is lost on me

Folks we have a “he didn’t realise he had been holding his breath “

A little unclear as to what is going on in this first fight scene. Also unless this Chick is bashing this boy with an actual thick, heavy, two handed piece of tree, I think it should be referred to as a branch, not a log. I am in fact picturing a teen wielding a tree trunk as a weapon and I cannot suspend my belief that much.