I'm not impressed with the writing so far, it is very basic and unpolished. Some parts particularly jarring: "... the pain raced through him, spurring him on beyond his physical limits", "The scarce amount of moonlight...". One description redeemed things "His hair was like a study in chaos conducted by a man who, far from keeping his pencils in size order, rarely kept them in the same place as each other".
— Dec 16, 2013 04:46PM
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