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Emmalg
Emmalg is 21% done
Weirdly it reads better after chapter 2.
Dec 20, 2013 03:14PM
Erasmus Hobart and the Golden Arrow

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Emmalg
Emmalg is 5% done
I'm struggling with the use of belie in this sentence, it comes across like a double negative to me "... with a glint in the eyes which suggested a man more knowledgeable than his years would usually belie and..."
Dec 16, 2013 05:06PM
Erasmus Hobart and the Golden Arrow


Emmalg
Emmalg is 5% done
I'm not impressed with the writing so far, it is very basic and unpolished. Some parts particularly jarring: "... the pain raced through him, spurring him on beyond his physical limits", "The scarce amount of moonlight...". One description redeemed things "His hair was like a study in chaos conducted by a man who, far from keeping his pencils in size order, rarely kept them in the same place as each other".
Dec 16, 2013 04:46PM
Erasmus Hobart and the Golden Arrow


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