"Took an arrow in the knee."
lol Skyrim, much? ;-)
Now, seriously. The story is interesting so far but the writing style could be improved. Several sentences aren't grammatically correct, and the POV wanders all over the place, which makes it difficult to know any of the characters. Every now and then, there's a beautiful descriptive sentence, but so far those are lost among the "huh?" moments.
— Aug 18, 2013 01:50PM
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