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The main problem of my story is that Jessica's fundraiser is not earning enough money for her leg, and it looks like she won't be able to run again.
I think that the climax is when one person gives them around $10,000, which gets enough money for Jessica to get her running leg, and also some extra to pay the medical bills.

At the first race that Jessica went to, she saw that Vanessa is a very stuck up girl, and that made her want to get a running leg even more, because she wants to beat Vanessa.

I like that the author includes a lot of description and allows me to feel a certain mood. For example, when Jessica went to the doctors office, the author described the waiting room as cold and the floor is stained dusty white. This gives me an eerie mood.

In my book, I found alliteration.
On Pg. 71, it says "Some sort of seat while I shower."
I think the writer included this because they wanted me to picture what was happening easier.

The POV of my book is first person. I know this because Charlie, the main character always says "I" "me" or "my".
Sentence one: "My eyes darted from tree to rock to creek to fern while I scrambled to figure out what to say next"
Sentence 2: "I wasn't sure that I had fixed my mistake, but at least I had tried."