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bad formatting and clunky sentences

MC comes off as either not being very bright to begin with or traveling between words grants brain damage. It was stated that it would take time to adjust but it’s like watching a concussed individual stumble around at this point.

the instructors are so shite they should be working at Hogwarts

“what do you mean you don’t know the things i haven’t told you?”

Yes, Zilly. You suck.

hollow characters drift in and out the narrative

disjointed af. can’t be chronological unless it took days/weeks to tell WK about Kagen

Too many shortcuts. Skipping around all over the place. Narratives that have no meaning

Such a mess. Guessing already who the Witch King is.

time to get this done…just kidding…time for a flashback to drag it out more

author seems more interested in setting up the multi worlds stuff instead of getting on with the story

couldn’t care less about A

67 pages before someone realizes that maybe they should listen to Hugh. You know…the person with an actual connection…

Coulda sworn last book the author said Havath was pretty much done for after the powers devastated their lands. Now they’re apparently fine enough to keep up a war. Feels like the author is back pedaling.

Author seems worried about describing outfits than working on weak plot points.

So far it seems the author can’t walk across a room without 6 changes of narrative and some vague utterances of things that would be important to know. A bit of an exaggeration perhaps but it’s taken about 150 pages just to go from one venue to another.

As much as I love Arlo, she’s an idiot. She’d be happy to be lynched just so she’d feel included. “For me?!? You shouldn’t have!”

So, Game of Thrones, we finally meet. Have at you then!

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