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The plot is often bugged down by descriptions of clothing and witty, but meaningless dialog; it's all very edgy, because everyone is always ready to rip a head off, but we don't know why, except for some vagueness like: "there's be hard feelings between them for a really long time".

Most to the plot could've been told in much less time, because it's really big-picture stuff like you find in a historical text.

The long, overexplained flashback is over.
This is still a 2 or 3 star story.
John clearly couldn't kill his darlings. That background lore he created, should've been kept as the authors "working knowledge"; to write out the full history is self-indulgent - and a mistake the editor should've caught.

63 pages, part two: now the story seems to be ready to begin; this is not a good thing. It's taking way too long, but it's getting more interesting and well enough written, so I will go from 2 stars to 3.

Read the first chapter; this is solidly in the 2-3 star area, not doubt about it.
I think this is going to be a slog to get through or a DNF.

Love it. Weird and wonderful.