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Uhh. Doesn't will not have a phone? He said that in book one. But in book 2, page 163,he answers his cell?

It's ok. Seriously, if this book was only from the POV of Mason, it would be soo much better, I think.
I really am getting annoyed with all the different POVs and back and forths. I don't feel connected to any of these characters and feel it would have been so much better with just Mason's POV and maybe even first person (but not a must for the 2nd).

It's ok. Seriously, if this book was only from the POV of Mason, it would be do much better, I think.
I really am getting annoyed with all the different POVs and back and forths. I don't feel connected to any of these characters and feel it would have been so much better with just Mason's POV and maybe even first person (but not a must for the 2nd).

first thoughts - why does this book start in first person, kind of, and then go to 3rd person for chapters 1 to 4 and then athe the beginning of chapter 5, during a dream, it's in first person again?

so far, I'm not liking how this book skips ahead a year. I think I would have liked a little more information of the time after wonderland and with her relationship with Jeb in between since she left

Switches tenses when it shouldn't.

I feel confused and conflicted about the story. The writing is meh, definitely needs an editing overhaul. Story flow and consistency is just off.
It could be so much better. That's the sad part. The story actually seems interesting it just seems to be executed wrongly. With just a detailed editor, it would be so much better.
Information just seems to be splattered everywhere but yet no where at the same time.

Needs editing, stat. It's like a dying, needs a heart transplant patient. Also, the 17 year old sounds more like a 13 year old.