Heart DeCoupeville’s Reviews > The Ex-cavenger Hunt > Status Update
Heart DeCoupeville
is 12% done
How old are these people? They act like 12 year olds. I'm no fan of this changing POV first person present tense style, but it would be a lot better if the writing itself were more . . .polished . . professional. . . mature.
— Feb 15, 2025 08:14PM
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Heart DeCoupeville
is 17% done
P. 45: "I growl, my voice low and irritated." This is the kind of thing that's everywhere, constant, almost every line of dialogue. Redundant nonsense. A growl is low and irritated. STOP IT.
— Feb 16, 2025 10:29AM
Heart DeCoupeville
is 16% done
Utterly implausible plot. So far, nothing but conversations with excessive speech tags/descriptions. His voice/her voice/my voice, tight/smooth/light/curious/firm/skeptical/excited/firm/dripping with sarcasm. That last one I think appeared three times. Lots of head shaking, leaning back, leaning forward. Lips are constantly twitching. Still don't know how old any of them are.
— Feb 16, 2025 10:23AM
