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is on page 151 of 501
"Turns out, panic I'd rather exhausting, and I fell asleep without meaning to, my head tipped back against the railing of the boat, before anyone has come out."
I'm having plenty of fun on the trio's adventures and escapades, but some of the word choices, like the grammar here, throws me off. I fall asleep before anyone "has come" out? "Comes out."
— Jun 14, 2025 10:11PM
I'm having plenty of fun on the trio's adventures and escapades, but some of the word choices, like the grammar here, throws me off. I fall asleep before anyone "has come" out? "Comes out."
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Mel
is on page 352 of 501
"What if he catches ME?" Percy asks.
She considers that for a moment, then says, "We won't get caught. Now step lively."
*slams books shut* Goddamn it Felicity. Trying to stowaway on a ship. With slaves on it. With your Black friend. You absolute twat. Of all the callous, cavalier, White Woman moves to- *sputters*
Someone really needs to invent a way for you to reach inside a book and smack the characters.
— Jun 18, 2025 07:11AM
She considers that for a moment, then says, "We won't get caught. Now step lively."
*slams books shut* Goddamn it Felicity. Trying to stowaway on a ship. With slaves on it. With your Black friend. You absolute twat. Of all the callous, cavalier, White Woman moves to- *sputters*
Someone really needs to invent a way for you to reach inside a book and smack the characters.
Mel
is on page 12 of 501
"It's hard to be sympathetic when I've told him ever since he adopted it that unless he gives me a better explanation, his diet is absurd."
*rereads sentence* See... that isn't a reason. That's an example. You're describing HOW you are being unsympathetic, not why.
— Jun 14, 2025 08:52AM
*rereads sentence* See... that isn't a reason. That's an example. You're describing HOW you are being unsympathetic, not why.
Mel
is on page 8 of 501
"They can hardly be blamed. I'd fall in love with me, if I met me." And then I flash him a smile that is equal parts rapscallion and boyish dimples so deep you could pour tea into them."
First off - this starts off so fun! Just a couple of hungover delinquents falling out of bed, stumbling about, cheerfully insulting each other. Immediate tone established.
But oof, that awkward first person narrative description.
— Jun 14, 2025 08:46AM
First off - this starts off so fun! Just a couple of hungover delinquents falling out of bed, stumbling about, cheerfully insulting each other. Immediate tone established.
But oof, that awkward first person narrative description.
