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"...Jack grappled with the reigns..." Reins. You guide horses with reins! Reigns is what a king or queen does!
"Cloven seemed rather bored by the adolescences display." Adolescent's. Possessive. Adolescences would be having multiple episodes of puberty.
"...I had reached a new level or recklessness..."
Of!
"...resist against the tugs I made against the reigns." Please...why?? Every. Single. Instance.
— Sep 27, 2016 08:18PM
"Cloven seemed rather bored by the adolescences display." Adolescent's. Possessive. Adolescences would be having multiple episodes of puberty.
"...I had reached a new level or recklessness..."
Of!
"...resist against the tugs I made against the reigns." Please...why?? Every. Single. Instance.
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Kris
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"...repay her for all the help she had been over the last few weeks." ....what?? All the help she had been over. ..........????
— Sep 27, 2016 08:29PM
Kris
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"...all of whom lived and worked there." You can use whom correctly, but so many other things incorrectly? I'd weep with joy of it weren't for the rest of the book's grammar and spelling.
— Sep 27, 2016 08:21PM
Kris
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Good grief, the editing!!!! Your /= you're. Rein is not interchangeable with reign. Random punctuation. Things made possessive that aren't even plural. Lots of out instead of our. Words that are ill fitted for that usage (vaguely correct in meaning but really not what should've been used) or are just totally wrong (their meaning doesn't fit at all). It's very distracting!!!!!!
— Sep 27, 2016 07:47PM
