JasperKazai’s Reviews > Hometown Hero > Status Update
JasperKazai
is 14% done
I take back the slight leniency I gave the writing last update. This is terribly written. I've seen fanfics with worse writing, sure, but those are just fanfics. This is a published novel. It's bad. It has that super stilted and far too casual almost conversational style that reeks of amateur-ness. I'm thinking I might drop this, that's how bad it is. I'm not loving the story yet, which is making it worse.
— Sep 30, 2025 03:12PM
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JasperKazai
is 31% done
Alright, I'm dropping this. I had decided to give it to the first sex scene - I actually went past it. The writing somewhat improved during the sex scenes, which I find funny. But it's uninteresting. There's no connection to these characters. He's literally breeding women as a service, moving onto the next after one is done. Barely any background about them. There's no excitement. And the writing sucks otherwise.
— Oct 01, 2025 05:28PM
JasperKazai
is 8% done
I've seen worse writing, but this isn't great. The foreword (spelled that wrong last time lol) said he wrote it in 8 days, and it shows. Just right now it said amt. instead of amount. In dialogue. Like come on.
So the mc got a new penis (because of course) and the description of it was almost disconcertingly fetishistic. Twice in 2 pages he compared it to something on a boy and no stop that's creepy as fuck.
— Sep 29, 2025 12:32PM
So the mc got a new penis (because of course) and the description of it was almost disconcertingly fetishistic. Twice in 2 pages he compared it to something on a boy and no stop that's creepy as fuck.
JasperKazai
is 3% done
Trash time! Been awhile since I read some trash. I picked this somewhat randomly off of my list. Reading the forward the author wrote... I don't know. This seems like it might be a bit too much, even for me. But let's see.
— Sep 28, 2025 12:20PM

