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Defeating him with the power of kissing

We can't let him hurt Molly, but that other guy? Fuck him I guess.

"They look like goths," I replied.
"And what is the center of goth culture?" Gabriel said.
Ive looked at him, her eyes wide. "Death."

Pffffft. They determine they're going to be at the cemetery but my answer was going to be Spencers circa 2002.

Bethany crying and whining about being told everything ends when just a chapter or so ago she was thinking about how one day human kind will end and everything turn to dust. Like girl you are already aware of this

If you have to whisper it and call it the 's word' and then slowly spell it out like you're embarrassed you're not ready for sex. The fact that we have a whole chapter called 'The S Word' is just cringe worthy.

Penis. Just say penis. If you can't say penis then maybe you shouldn't be having your characters discuss sex as they are clearly too immature to be having it.

While I'm sure it's probably that deep, but that is just a typical love poetry cliche.

"Jake was eighteen and entitled to make a play for whoever he liked."

Uh. No.

So you know you can have sex, but I have to ask why did God bother giving you reproductive organs in your human form?

Oh is what is going to pass for a plot about to show up?