madelén’s Reviews > The Witching Hour > Status Update

i think that was the last of the mayfair file chapters and to that i say HALLELUJAH. truly a slogfest to get through, so much telling and next to no showing. inefficient storytelling methinks, there has to be a better way to convey the relevant information to the reader

First of all: EWWWWWW
Second: there are sooooo many passages in here that could be posted on r/MenWritingWomen, how on earth was this written by a woman