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Shane
is 95% done
Another irritation, when you make a character powerful in one paragraph, then you make them stupidly weak in the next. That is extremely frustrating. It means a reader can not believe what is truth. It's like you're letting the character lie to them self and the reader, very misleading. Ok..done ranting. ;-)
— Dec 21, 2016 07:40AM
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Shane
is 85% done
The story is a brilliant one. The execution of the story needs much work. I'm not finished reading yet, but because it is a long story, but I wanted to write my thoughts down as I progressed. The action in this story is well done, but there are parts that drive me a bit batty. In brieft, this story could be many books each being approx 400. So much could be expanded, mainly supporting characters, history, etc.
— Dec 20, 2016 09:23AM
