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Arjun T
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Unfortunately a little more telling than showing at the moment. Also plot has lost its way a little. Started off engaging and with high stakes, now not entirely sure where’s it’s going, what the tension is, and appears to be no stakes?
— 6 hours, 39 min ago
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Arjun T
is on page 172 of 406
I get that it’s fiction but no one talks like this. Also too many ‘cute’ scenes that literally serve no purpose. And some scenes are SO dragged out with pointless details and bickering it becomes boring. This needed a good editor.
— 6 hours, 28 min ago
