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is 50% done
Small grievances I have with the writing:
- Using "same" in the dialogue. I didn't notice it until I read a review and now I have.
- Using men's jaws ticking or clenching as one of few ways to describe that they are mad or tense. Again, I didn't notice it until someone pointed it out but now I can't not notice it.
- Using periods after every word in a dialogue to display frustration (even spelling it out once?)
— Nov 26, 2025 08:29PM
- Using "same" in the dialogue. I didn't notice it until I read a review and now I have.
- Using men's jaws ticking or clenching as one of few ways to describe that they are mad or tense. Again, I didn't notice it until someone pointed it out but now I can't not notice it.
- Using periods after every word in a dialogue to display frustration (even spelling it out once?)
