L. M. Faris’s Reviews > Hypercage > Status Update
L. M. Faris
is 17% done
Would have liked a bit more of an idea of why these two are together. I don't like the way he talks to his wife; it seems cruel.
— Jan 14, 2017 08:39AM
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L. M. Faris
is 63% done
"Jake was writhing in the cot. Face flush with blood." - I thought he was injured and blood was streaming down his face. Thank goodness that's not the case. I think his face was merely red from crying/screaming?
— Jan 14, 2017 08:43AM
L. M. Faris
is 54% done
"she said, throwing him a repeating smile..." I'm not sure what this means. I like the character though and her physical description was really well done. She seems fun.
— Jan 14, 2017 08:42AM
L. M. Faris
is 7% done
"creating a single blossom of destruction against the blackness." - standout line. Love, love this imagery.
— Jan 14, 2017 08:36AM
L. M. Faris
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"Matching his thoughts, a rear camera view snapped into view on his HUD, showing the missiles spread out in a cluster behind him." - I love the technology in this book. The grammar and proofreading issues are distracting, however.
— Jan 14, 2017 08:35AM
L. M. Faris
is 2% done
Action-packed start. It would help if the reader were told who "he" is. Not given a name until page 2.
— Jan 14, 2017 08:32AM
L. M. Faris
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Action-packed start. It would help if the reader were told who "he" is. Not given a name until page 2.
— Jan 14, 2017 08:31AM
