⦻ eyeless jack ⦻’s Reviews > Vile Heart: A Dark MM Sci-Fi College Romance > Status Update

Ok this is pissing me off. You can’t even remember your own character’s names??? Misspelling Ilya/Illya/Illyas and Galaya/Galya multiple times each way and somehow you and your editor (if you had one) both not catching it???

A light year is a measure of distance, not of time… maybe google it to check if you’re using a phrase correctly before publishing it in a book

lame

The inconsistencies just don’t stop

“Being privileged was awesome, but it didn’t always make things easier.”


What yes it does that’s literally what privilege is
Also nothing about this feels consensual in any way, he says this line bc he’s aroused that the man he loves keeps telling him no

Dear author:
So is it Ilya, Illya, or Illyas?

Fire your editor immediately, if you even had one, because this is a mess.

“Camren straightened his black heart pin and watched how it shone brightly. Red. the colour of blood. The colour of love.”


Wait is the pin black or red?

She keeps spelling one of the character’s names differently every time

This feels like a hastily-written first draft