⦻ jack ⦻’s Reviews > Loving Proudly: An Anthology of Queer Love for Queer Rights > Status Update

The typos are lowkey making this unreadable. Like I can decipher what it’s supposed to say, but there’s SO MANY that I don’t want to continue (several spelling/grammar errors or misuse of words and one story kept unintentionally switching tenses)

“Really, I’m pan but I like the Bi flag more.”


FUCKING REAL & same

“Ares Alexander Stone is THEE leader of the Black Vipers.”


Of course he is

“Tell me where Marcus is, and I will kill you quickly.” Ares grumbles, pulling the knife from out of his belt, showing the Skinwalker that he does mean business, “I have no qualms with eliminating a piece of shit like yourself, but I need information. Give it to me.”


For a supposedly badass mafia man, why does he sound like a whiny preteen? “Give it to me” hello??? How is that effective interrogation???

I DESPERATELY need authors to stop having their characters sing during sex. It’s so fucking cringey.

“What, Constance?” he asked, exacerbated.


I don’t think that word means what you think it means.
Did you maybe mean exasperated?

Story 2 will be 2-3 stars maybe I think