⦻ jack ⦻’s Reviews > Loving Proudly: An Anthology of Queer Love for Queer Rights > Status Update

The typos are lowkey making this unreadable. Like I can decipher what it’s supposed to say, but there’s SO MANY that I don’t want to continue (several spelling/grammar errors or misuse of words and one story kept unintentionally switching tenses)

“Really, I’m pan but I like the Bi flag more.”


FUCKING REAL & same

“Tell me where Marcus is, and I will kill you quickly.” Ares grumbles, pulling the knife from out of his belt, showing the Skinwalker that he does mean business, “I have no qualms with eliminating a piece of shit like yourself, but I need information. Give it to me.”


For a supposedly badass mafia man, why does he sound like a whiny preteen? “Give it to me” hello??? How is that effective interrogation???

I DESPERATELY need authors to stop having their characters sing during sex. It’s so fucking cringey.

“What, Constance?” he asked, exacerbated.


I don’t think that word means what you think it means.
Did you maybe mean exasperated?

This story keeps switching between past tense and present tense (in the same scene) and it’s throwing me off

Story 2 will be 2-3 stars maybe I think