Eshana Ranasinghe’s Reviews > The Long Game > Status Update

I'm not saying it is a continuity error that both the Voyageurs and the Admirals were called the number one ranked team in the same season. I am saying they should clarify why they are both ranked number one like maybe it was different lists or categories like historically vs. currently (although it makes sense for Montreal to be ranked first and MAYBE Scott Hunter to be the top player idk)

Everyone is sad and pathetic and suffering rn and I'm having so much fun. This the best writing so far. Ilya being depressed and going to therapy us so good.

* me wielding a spay bottle at the characters*: no more weird dirty talk! Illegal! Forbidden!
What even is this? (excerpt below)
"My impatient slut,” Ilya growled as he fucked him. “Could not even wait for me.”
“Just,” Shane gasped, “being efficient.”
“So good,” Ilya said, "At time. Management.”
“Wanted your dick.”
“You have it. Is it good?”
“Fuck yes. Love it. Harder."

Oh this is painful. Ilya basically ruined his career by going to Ottawa which has such a weak team. He essential ruined his chances of ever getting into the playoffs let along a chance at the Stanley Cup. All for a man!? (No wonder Yuna was appalled when they told her) Ilya gave up so much but Shane's gave up nothing!

If Shane and Ilya ever break up, I think Ilya should get Shane's parents. It only seems fair.

The way the sex scenes are written are better, like more variety in phrasing compared to the last one. There are still (not exactly clichés but) fanfiction turn of phrases. Common phrases you'd see in fanfiction smut and the incorporate it into your own writing. I'm hyper aware I think because I also use them. Stand outs were "heat pooled low in his belly" and "this earned a (sound/reaction) from..."

I cant decide if this is cute or cringe. Some things are so over the top saccharine I literally face palm. Like Ilya has a loon tattoo now? This feels like a very indulgent Heated Rivalry fan fiction (derogatory)