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Melina S
is 38% done
The story is really good, but the character and continuity errors are driving me nuts.
Valen's too old to use contractions in speech, but his inner monologue is full of them and slang. He's scared of a car even though Ava drove him to the furniture store 2 chapters ago. He's holding 2 coffee cups but takes off his jacket and then puts the cups down. 😕
— Apr 12, 2026 12:35PM
Valen's too old to use contractions in speech, but his inner monologue is full of them and slang. He's scared of a car even though Ava drove him to the furniture store 2 chapters ago. He's holding 2 coffee cups but takes off his jacket and then puts the cups down. 😕
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