Becca’s Reviews > Sky Jewel Legacy: Heritage > Status Update

1. “…embodiment of the sorcerer… extension of himself” not themselves. Again, you can’t go from a singular to a plural.
2. “…turned back into her ghoulishly radiant female form…” Human. Human form. She’s female even as a bat, that doesn’t go away.

1. The plural of pegasus is pegasi.
2. Jen can recognize the scent of Indian gooseberries?
3. James Bond is English, enchante is French. A better comparison would have been Dartanian, or Inspector Clouseau.

Oof okay so the writing is a bit rough, could have benefitted from a professional editor. Just some writing and grammar errors, clunky sentence structure at times. There should probably be a little more “show don’t tell,” and Jan discovering her “omnimancy” should have been revealed by discovery rather than just telling the reader. She should have discovered her powers with practice or by accident.