jaycee ann ✞’s Reviews > A New Beginning > Status Update

bro, if I was left in charge of my siblings for a weekend and the power went out cause of a massive storm, I think we’d all be panicking 😭

I love how it touched on Nick’s relationship with his siblings as the oldest. I’m also the oldest, and I feel a huge duty towards my little siblings—something that really can’t be explained to someone who isn’t the oldest. If any of my siblings ever need anything, I’ll be the first to their side. Whether it be now, me as a teenager and them as kids, or when we’re all adults.

I feel so bad for Patrick and Dan

I love capture the flag! It’s my favorite youth group game

Nick is my favorite so far

Just a writing tip for you, Jacquelyn! To make dialogue flow a bit better, limit the use of characters names inside the dialogue. Most people don’t use each other’s names in real life conversation, unless it’s to add emphasis.