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This reads as if the writer went 'ooh, this'll sound like I'm a real artist' before putting down each sentence, then didn't bother to read the sentences put together even a single time before submitting the manuscript - and then nobody else did either? Do books just not get edited at all, now?
Plus it's littered with poor grammar, like: 'She was making his hyperfocused expression, even more intense than his.'