Holly’s Reviews > Annie Freeman's Fabulous Traveling Funeral > Status Update

I forgot Sarah was active on here recently too, you can’t read these either.











Either I’m getting used to the writing or it’s getting a little better. Still very run on sentence-y

Not as bad as first two chapters, can see how the grief stuff could be compelling but it’s a little too cringy for me

Allison don’t read this















nonstop run on sentences

also yea we know you’re a woman you don’t need to keep mentioning your tits (I get it’s supposed to be a metaphor whatever)

said she leaned over her mothers coffin .8 years ago and then says it’s been 8 months since her mother passed 12 pages later. .8 years is not 8 months bffr